I for one think it's pretty damn good (would buy that shirt for sure), however the guitar could probably go for a less acoustic look (unless that was the point, and I'm just missing something that's rather important about the whole thing).

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yeah, i was kinda going for the whole dashboard confessional type feel. i thought the electric guitar would make him look too punk.

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i like the writing and i like the picture but i dont think they match each other as well as they could. other than that it is awesome.

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You nailed the mood and your haircut/posture/clothing is great (I particularly like the argyle socks). The composition works well for the most part, but there's some stuff I would change if I were to do a second draft.

The spot to the right of the guitar, between the words 'your' and 'emo' is this blank rectangle - it draws the eye in a lot. I'd close the space up by tightening in the type and either slanting it or find a way to get the neck of the guitar in there. Right now it's too empty and definitely pulls my eye away. Or, space out the words more so that there's not a noticeable gap around the guitar.

On that same note, the emo guy's right foot is pointing directly at us, so we don't see any of the side. The side of his other foot has the big black part, and it just looks kind of uneven. I'd either tilt his right foot so that some of the side is facing the viewer, or making the black part of his left shoe white. Just even out the black/white in the shoes somehow.

The mountain climber belt clip creates a tangent with the guy's pants which is somewhat noticeable. I'd push it back so that it's a bit behind him.

Same goes for the "Boo Hoo" on his T-shirt. If it were a bit bigger and overlapped by the sweater, it would still be readable and work a bit better.

The exterior lineweights are a bit uneven. You went heavier around the body of the guitar and parts of the shirt. I'd either thin these out, or make the whole exterior line thicker to bring it together (I'd opt to make the exterior line thicker, though you should thin the line for the waist/bottom of the shirt regardless).

Stylistically, I might put some squiggly frayed guitar strings around the guitar tuners. I'd lose the lines on the neck of the "boo hoo" t-shirt, as they make it look like part of the sweater. I'd put more shading lines on the left pant leg (right now there's two and they look like a cuff-racing-stripe). Emo guy's left arm also doesn't connect with the forearm. Not glaring but I noticed after looking for a minute. Same thing for the back, it would have to slope in a lot to meet where it is towards the waist.

Guitar strings? I dunno - I'd play with the idea. I sort of want to see them, but I don't know if they'd really work. You could make them all broken, which could work and give him something to really cry about (and he wouldn't be able to play, which is good).

thank you so much for the help. i think the only things i didn't change were the strings (just because that always seems to make guitars look too busy in my style) and what you called shading lines on the rolled up pants are supposed to be the inside hem of the pantleg. i took out the black boxes behind the words because it wasn't working as well as it was before; should i put them back in?

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Give the type and the figure more breathing room, they're too close right now for me. Also I would try a less grungy font, I think it's too much. I would still stick with the grunge, but i'd try calming it down some.

i cut down on some of the grunge and moved the figure away, but i'm not sure that i like the composition as much. thoughts?

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